1. The thing I like most about the paper is how you talk about going from hating reading and writing to learning that it is not that bad if its about something that interests you. I like this because I can relate to exactly what you mean.
2. This paper is about how you have transformed in a reader and as a writer over time. This paper stays on topic the whole time and does a good job at answering the main points in the prompt and fulfills all the necessary requirements.
3. There needs to be more detail where you talk about the series of books that you continued reading and what it was about that series of books that interests you.
4. Each of your paragraphs discusses only one idea and everything in the paragraph is related to that specific idea.
5. You're introduction is great. Once I read that I had to keep reading. In the second body paragraph you talk about reading a series of books, try expanding on why you liked that series and tell us what the series of books is. Your third and forth body paragraphs flow very nicely, They have good transition sentences and your conclusion wraps everything up nicely.
Overall the body paragraphs support your thesis and you remain on topic the whole time. I did not find and grammar or spelling mistakes either. But I would suggest maybe a little stronger hook in the beginning of the introduction.
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